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Section 2.8 (comment 10)

Open LPardue opened this issue 3 years ago • 2 comments

Section 2.8: We suggest rephrasing this sentence for easy comprehension or limiting the number of adverbs in this sentence. Overuse of adverbs in this context may confuse readers.

Original:

   Reliance on the version number
   field for the purposes of admission control is similarly likely to
   rapidly lead to unintended failure modes. 

Perhaps: Similarly, reliance on the version number field for the purpose of admission control is likely to rapidly lead to unintended failure modes.

LPardue avatar Sep 13 '22 00:09 LPardue

Alternatively we could replace "similarly" which "also". I think having this advert is actually important. If we want to remove one, I might rather remove "rapidly".

mirjak avatar Sep 19 '22 12:09 mirjak

so, NEW:

Reliance on the version number field for the purpose of admission control is also likely to lead to unintended failure modes.

britram avatar Sep 20 '22 19:09 britram